| When you write a cover letter, does it hook employers and leave
them no choice but to call you for a job interview? If the answer
is "No," you're not alone.
To succeed, every sentence in your cover letter must be compelling
and must prove that you -- and nobody else -- are right for the
job.
How do you achieve this? Take the "So, what?" test. It
can actually force you to write better cover letters than ever before.
It works like this. After reading every sentence in your next cover
letter, ask yourself: "So, what?" Is that last sentence
compelling, or fluff? Necessary? TRUE? If not, rewrite or remove
it. Then ask yourself "So, what?" again.
Here are some real-world examples taken from cover letters I've
seen this week.
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BEFORE
"I am currently employed
with Oxydyne Systems in Detroit in the Production Logistic Equipment
Assembly Division as a Technical Support Manager. (SO, WHAT?) I
am willing to take up any engineering post." SO,
WHAT?
AFTER
"I am applying for a position
where my eight years of engineering and end-user training experience
will add value to logistical operations for your clients."
In the AFTER example, the writer clearly
states the type of job he's seeking, while promising to add value
for the employer's clients. Much more powerful.
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BEFORE
"The message you are now
reading is not a typical cover letter with an attached resume. Please,
do not be afraid to continue reading because this evolving communique
describes what I can do for Stanley Publishing (SP), if I am chosen
as its new Marketing Manager."
SO WHAT?
Stop! Don't take forever to appeal to an
employer's self interest. Often, you can find better opening paragraphs
halfway down the page, as in this AFTER example:
AFTER
"I am energised by the opportunity
to achieve significant things for your firm. Here's what I can give
to Stanley Publishing:
Five years of publication and marketing
experience for Fortune 500 clientele, resulting in repeat business,
210% revenue growth and three industry awards."
This AFTER example came from the fifth and sixth paragraphs of the
cover letter, but works much better as an opening.
If every sentence passes the "So, what?"
test, your cover letters will be concise, hard-hitting and irresistible
to employers. So there!
Best of luck to you!
Article by Kevin Donlin of Guaranteed Résumés,
a Minneapolis-based résumé service. Since 1995, Guaranteed Résumés
has provided résumés, Internet résumés, cover letters and job searches
for clients in 44 states and 23 countries.
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